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Here is my weekly writing, I hope ya'll have a good day.
Enjoy!
Alone
I rose above the clouds. Clutching the umbrella, gripping the bag, I drifted gently upwards. Past
Saturn, past Jupiter. Was this natural? Not necessarily. Comets flashed around me, but I didn’t
bat an eyelash. It all seemed pale in comparison to what had happened before.
Saturn, past Jupiter. Was this natural? Not necessarily. Comets flashed around me, but I didn’t
bat an eyelash. It all seemed pale in comparison to what had happened before.
My sister was gone. Stolen by… someone? Something? It wasn’t her time, but she had to go.
A tear traced its way down my cheek. I scrubbed it away, this was not the time for crying. Not
here, not now. The clouds were light and fluffy, the sky below me pale lilac, the sky about dark
navy. Saturn was perched beside me, a massive gas giant. Comets traced the sky, and I was
lost. Lost in cloud. Lost in space. Lost, but above all. And above all, I was alone.
A tear traced its way down my cheek. I scrubbed it away, this was not the time for crying. Not
here, not now. The clouds were light and fluffy, the sky below me pale lilac, the sky about dark
navy. Saturn was perched beside me, a massive gas giant. Comets traced the sky, and I was
lost. Lost in cloud. Lost in space. Lost, but above all. And above all, I was alone.
It was a really good story. I loved your descriptive words. It really dragged me into the story and I really enjoyed it. There is nothing that I noticed that you have to work on. Good job!
ReplyDeleteI really enjoyed this story about marry Poppins. It was really descriptive and I don't think you need to change anything
ReplyDeleteThank you :)
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